Peer Review

"The Guarani: Suffering at the Hands of Change"

Does the draft have a main point (thesis)?
I think that the main point in her paper is the following:
“the process has taken with it various species of plants and fauna, and the virtually unnoticed standards of living of several indigenous groups worldwide.”

Find an instance of what you consider an interesting or useful example, image, chart, etc. and explain why. ( Living in the rainforests, the Guarani hold their environment in incredibly high regard. For them, the land is above all, it can do no evil and will supply them with everything they need on a day to day basis. Their culture and religious beliefs have been founded on these principles for centuries. Although some tribes now practice Catholicism, those that follow the path of their ancestors continue to practice animism. This asserts that nature itself has a soul; that the sky, the trees, the animals, and even stones have a soul. This belief branches off into their healing practices and shamanistic leadership systems. Shamans, who are the religious leaders in the communities, use the plant species they have at their disposal in order to create remedies for a wide range of ills, and provide a connection between the people and the Gods.

Find a place in the paper that you consider confusing or boring and explain why. (You should cut and paste the passage or at least say in what page and paragraph it is).
Jesuit missions made the journey in search of new followers, and when they learned of the atrocities being done to the slaves, they offered the Guarani conversion as a form of escape. Thousands of Guarani flocked to the missions; they learned the Catholic prayers, but continued their ways in secret. Finally, in the beginning of the eighteenth century several European countries waged war in the region wanted to stake their claim on the areas now known as Paraguay, Uruguay, and Argentina. Many Guarani stayed to fight and die, alongside their priests, while others saw their chance and fled back into the forest. Many tribes reverted to the old way of life; those who had difficulty doing so chose to take the occasional job as a gardener or maintenance worker for a village farmer. But deep in the forest they stayed, looking expectantly into a bright future, and waiting.

Does the draft acknowledge where information comes from IN THE BODY OF THE TEXT? (the bibliography does not count for this question)
Yes, she uses sites at the end of the paragraphs. Though I think it will be better to incorporate quotes in the middle or through out the paragraphs and then explain them.

Would you recommend that the writer get some help with grammar before turning in the last draft? Why? Why not?
I think that her writing is very good. I think she doesn’t need revisions but just add more information.

**Christina hasn't published her research paper.